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Posted on April 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM

 Hello! How are you? This post is actually the latest in a series of assignments from an interesting online writing group I've joined. More info about the participating members in this winsome group can be found as you read along. The writing-prompt chosen for the month of April is "dead bunnies", gulp...well, that was my initial reaction. However, after reading some fine writing shared by this talented pool, thought I'd catch the wave of inspiration and weave the prompt into a Chapter entitled "4 months later" on a work-in-progress...

 

 

  

 True to his word, following several months of media speculation, and plenty of second-guessing by the political-pundits, and hushed murmurs within his own trusted inner-circle, Governor James Quinn had made a bold, non-partisan move, tapping a Republican to fulfill the remainder of David Shuman's term. Shuman, Connecticut's longest serving US Senator, had perished in an ill-fated plane crash months before, leaving the governor with the constitutional power to appoint a successor. In a calculated move to improve his tanking statewide approval ratings, and to ensure his party's chances at regaining the Senate seat now held by the inexperienced congressman he appointed, Governor Quinn was banking on an electorate that would ensure one of his more astute, experienced political cronies would regain that seat in the general election. Meanwhile, on the surface, if appointing a popular Republican improved his image statewide as a no nonsense, let's work together chief-executive, that was a good thing.

  

While the shrewd governor was enjoying his cleverness and new found political footing, some 400 miles away down in the nation's capital, the yet to be named main-character in this storyline rose from his brown leather recliner in the den of his Georgetown condo, picking up speed as he quickened his pace across the living room floor towards the kitchen, where Zoe's incessant barking in the backyard seemed to pierce the still and quiet of an otherwise lazy Sunday afternoon. The beautiful yellow lab's owner, Rose, a young and dedicated congressional intern, had also lost her life in Senator Shuman's mangled private jet that fateful day. Rather than follow his initial instinct to give Zoe away to a good family, he decided to keep her in honor of the trust Rose placed in him to watch her while she set out to accompany Senator Shuman on a campaign swing through the state. One of his favorite memories of the distinguished gentleman was taking a picture together beneath a handsomely framed plaque hanging on his office wall, which read: "No man is so tall as when he stoops to help a child"--Abraham Lincoln

                                                                

                

 Zoe was now up on her front legs atop the back-stairway landing, frantically scratching at the kitchen screen door. Bracing himself for impact, he slowly opened the screen door, expecting her to leap into his awaiting arms for a hug, but now that she had his full attention, she suddenly spun around and darted straight towards some bushes near a hugh evergreen shading the white-picket fenceline some 25 yards from the back stoop. Over-running her intended target and sliding a few feet past what appeared to be an emerging brown hole, she let out another loud bark as if to summon him over. "What's the matter, Zoe?" he said calmly, reaching down to gently pet her, trying to reassure her that everything was going to be okay, though his first instinct--attributed to his youthful days spent on the farm-- was wondering where he could grab a large branch if she had stumbled upon a snake somehow. Disarming his fear was the slight movement of what appeared at first to be mice, but closer inspection determined that Zoe had discovered a couple live bunnies amid, sadly, a few dead bunnies...

  

After contacting the animal rescue hotline to seek help for the surviving bunnies, he returned to the scene, where upon closer examination it appeared that someone or something had dug under a few wooden planks near the tree...

 

 

 

 

 Thanks for reading along. Please venture over to the following websites for some interesting reading. Please take a few minutes to leave the authors a comment (offering some support, encouragement, feedback, etc. ) Don't hesitate to bookmark them for future reading:

 

 

Participants and posts:

orion_mk3 - http://nonexistentbooks.wordpress.com (link to this month's post)

KatieJ - http://www.crystalwindchimes.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

kiwiviktor81 - http://storygenerator.net (link to this month's post)

Nissie - http://www.paperheroes.net (link to this month's post)

SuzanneSeese - http://www.viewofsue.blogspot.com/ (link to this month's post)

pyrosama - http://matrix-hole.blogspot.com/ (link to this month's post)

dclary - http://www.davidwclary.com/ (link to this month's post)

randi.lee - http://emotionalnovel.blogspot.com (link to this month's post)

AFord - You Are Here

julzperri - http://www.fishandfrivolity.blogspot.com/ (link to this month's post)

Penelope - http://poet-slash-writer.blogspot.com/ (link to this month's post)

Araenvo - http://plottypus.blogspot.com/ (link to this month's post)

areteus - http://lurkingmusings.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

magicmint - http://www.loneswing.com/ (link to this month's post)

writingismypassion - http://charityfaye.blogspot.com (link to this month's post)

Turndog-Millionaire - http://turndog-millionaire.com/ (link to this month's post)

Whisky - http://nopart2.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

Anarchicq - http://anarchicq.com/ (link to this month's post)

Ralph Pines - http://ralfast.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

Joliedupre - http://www.preciousmonsters.com/ (link to this month's post)

Tomspy77 - http://thomaswillamspychalski.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

Bogna - http://bemaslanka.wordpress.com/ (link to this month's post)

 

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27 Comments

Reply Kelly
02:01 PM on April 09, 2012 
Alan,

Is it a short story or novel? If it is a novel, then remember it needs to be over 50,000 words.Literary agents are looking at first-time authors with novels nothing short of 50,00 words. Just some food for thought. I'd love 2 read more from you.
Reply Andrea B
05:12 PM on April 09, 2012 
A strong beginning. It has good pace -- it gives enough background and jumps right in. It has me wanting to read more which is always a writer's goal -- make 'em want more! :) I look forward to your next post!
Andrea
Reply Al
08:12 AM on April 10, 2012 
Good morning!

At this stage, Kelly, due to low word count, cannot say it's a novel per se. However, am aiming for something between 60,000-80,000 words, so as the feedback comes in it'll be easier to tidy the storyline up for edition. Thanks for the Add, and best wishes with all of your writing goals.

Glad you like it so far, Andrea. Thanks for venturing over and sharing your thoughts--much appreciated. Looking forward to reading some of your writing as you settle in over on the forums. Good to see you. Best wishes with all of your literary goals--Cheers!
Reply Randi Lee
01:48 PM on April 10, 2012 
I was waiting for this! Glad you posted your entry. Very, very nice read- loved it! My favorite part was the "yet-to-be-named-main-character" bit--- that made me happy rosy.

Anyway, Al, as usual you've provided me with a great read. Beginning is a hook, middle is intriguing, end is sad... but I guess that's to be expected with a dead bunny prompt!
Reply Al
03:56 PM on April 10, 2012 
Hey Randi_lee!

Thank you for venturing over--much appreciated. Didn't realize that naming characters would be much of a challenge, but in this case it hasn't exactly been easy. Not sure if you have personally struggled with this yourself. Your interesting and informative site covers a broad range of topics as it relates to the writing experience, so, perhaps you may share a link if you've tackled this kind of writer's block before (anything in your archives?) Good to see you, and enjoyed reading your own post--well-done--Cheers!
Reply Meesh
06:53 PM on April 10, 2012 
Allo Al!

So nice to see yoou safe and sound, did yoou have a great birthday weekend? I was thinking about yoou, lots and lots....

Anyway, when I saw your latest entry "Posted on April 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM " I scratched my head and wondered if I should wait until after the 12th to comment.... or was it ok to go for it after the 8th when I had the pleasure of reading it LOL
Soooo happy yoou opened up the comments yesterday.

My review, M-A-G-N-I-F-I-Q-U-E! as always, I, like the others here, do look forward for you next submission! I want to read more, more, more...It is written by someone with a rich imagination and with a great great heart.( I can vouch for that ) but also in your writings it shows!

CHEERS!
Reply Al
10:51 PM on April 10, 2012 
Meesh says...
Allo Al!

So nice to see yoou safe and sound, did yoou have a great birthday weekend? I was thinking about yoou, lots and lots....

Anyway, when I saw your latest entry "Posted on April 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM " I scratched my head and wondered if I should wait until after the 12th to comment.... or was it ok to go for it after the 8th when I had the pleasure of reading it LOL
Soooo happy yoou opened up the comments yesterday.

My review, M-A-G-N-I-F-I-Q-U-E! as always, I, like the others here, do look forward for you next submission! I want to read more, more, more...It is written by someone with a rich imagination and with a great great heart.( I can vouch for that ) but also in your writings it shows!

CHEERS!


Allo Meesh!

Thank you/Merci Beaucoupe! With this interesting group in mind, what I've done over the last few months since joining them is project my turn in the cycle to share--thus the safe date around the 12th each time-- with the understanding when I draft something- ideally I'd like to post before hitting the road...otherwise at least alert the group-leader, Orion_mk3, via PM mode with a link to my post, and open the comments before traveling. Have come to respect this group and value their time. Haven't been around long enough to find out what happens to anyone who dares to take the groups time for granted, gulp and shudder...but as long as it has nothing to do with being sent to the gallows or dungeon I should be fine, ha--only kidding...they all seem to be a classy, fun-loving bunch.

Am happy yoou, Randi_lee, Andrea, etc. have been so kind in launching this effort with your encouraging words--there's hope I may get the hang of this yet. Goodnight/Bonsoir!
Reply Christina
10:38 AM on April 11, 2012 
Very nice reading ~ you know how to use and play with words.

Keep writing ... !
Reply Al
11:15 AM on April 11, 2012 
Good morning, Christina!

Thanks for venturing over--much appreciated. Great pics of your "babies" by the way, handsome and beautiful creatures, but not sure if I'd dare walk them together, especially remembering the antics of my departed Prince who seemed to throw all of his obedience training away at the mere sight of a squirrel...try to imagine getting up off the ground in a heap amid a tangled lease around your ankles--fun-times...and people think the Three Stooges are funny.

Don't look now, but you have a new follower @ Twitter--best wishes with all of your writing goals.


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Reply jenc813
01:59 AM on April 12, 2012 
I continue to be drawn in by your story, Al. I could see myself glued to it on a rainy afternoon, sitting on the sofa in front of my fireplace. Zoe continues to be an endearing character, and one wonders if she can fathom what may have happened to her owner.
Reply Al
09:12 AM on April 12, 2012 
Good morning, Jen!

Appreciate your kind words of encouragement. Interesting point raised about whether Zoe, and/or pets/animals in general, have a keen sense of awareness relative to experiencing loss. Something tells me they do. Thus in this storyline I've decided to help her transition as smooth as possible from her initial caregiver to the individual she was entrusted to instead of bouncing her all around. Good to see you. Enjoy your day.
Reply charity
10:18 AM on April 12, 2012 
Makes me want to read more. Good job!
Reply Meesh
10:48 AM on April 12, 2012 
Oh! I do want to be the 13th comment, in honour of Friday the 13th which is tomorrow (gulp) just kidding... It will be our second one for 2012, and we're all still here!

Thanks Al, on your explanation on why you post in advance (or the date) as I see it, that's your admirable sense of responsibility.

Now I did fail to thank you as you explained or tied in how Zoe was spared from the plane crash. Yes, you reassured me a while back, when you had mentioned her owner had sadly perished... You made a point to let me know that Zoe had been spared.

I should have known, because Zoe means "life" in Greek. You manage to weave things into your storyline so smoothly.

Anyway, sigh... must say, safe travels my friend! Au revoir, soyez vigilant mon ami!
Reply Al
11:11 AM on April 12, 2012 
Thank You, Charity! Appreciate your encouraging words. Am looking forward to reading your post @ http://charityfaye.blogspot.com when I return online on Sunday afternoon--cheers!
Reply Al
11:12 AM on April 12, 2012 
Merci Beaucoupe, Meesh! Appreciate your winsome sense of humour @ the 13th--yikes!...

Oh! I do want to be the 13th comment, in honour of Friday the 13th which is tomorrow (gulp) just kidding... It will be our second one for 2012, and we're all still here!

Thanks Al, on your explanation on why you post in advance (or the date) that's your admirable sense of responsibility, as I see it.

Now I did fail to thank you as you explained or tied in how Zoe was spared from the plane crash. Yes, you reassured me a while back, when you had mentioned her owner had sadly perished... You made a point to let me know that Zoe had been spared.

I should have known, because Zoe means "life" in Greek. You manage to weave things into your storyline so smoothly.

Anyway, sigh... must say, safe travels my friend! Au revoir, soyez vigilant mon ami!
Reply orion_mk3
01:31 PM on April 12, 2012 
Nice job! It seems that you've integrated the continuing narrative from your previous posts into the prompt. Does that mean we're helping to get you to 50,000 words, 1000 words at a time?
Reply Beverly
12:16 PM on April 15, 2012 
Alan, here are my thoughts. Hope they help.

Looks good. You might want to watch using ?was? too often. Try using active rather than passive verbs when possible. I see the blue I used doesn't show up. Sorry.

*While the shrewd governor was enjoying [enjoyed].

*Zoe was now [stood - or some action verb] up on her front legs atop the back-stairway landing, frantically scratching at the kitchen...

*Disarming his fear was the slight movement of what appeared at first to be mice, but closer inspection determined that Zoe had discovered a couple live bunnies amid, sadly, a few dead bunnies... [Maybe say: The slight movement of what at first appeared to be mice disarmed his fear.]

Hope you can make sense of this. Look for the [ ] where I made suggestions. Nice story. Try to use active verbs when possible.
Reply Al
01:21 PM on April 15, 2012 
*Hello Beverly!

Thank You for sharing your helpful insights and suggestions--much appreciated. I've taken the liberty of bookmarking your site @ http://beverlystowemcclure.wordpress.com/ for future reference. Happy Sunday!

*Hello Orion_mk3!

Yes, cannot deny it with a straight face, you guys have been a source of inspiration and help. However, the lesson & challenge for me taken from the use of the monthly prompts is to be sure to fully integrate them into the storyline (for example, with a hat tip to screenplay writer Mark Keller @ http://theorangehellus.com/, Zoe's discovery may have also unearthed a buried treasure chest filled with money, or skeletal remains, gulp, as the storyline unfolds.... Thus "dead bunnies" now enhances the storyline, and introduces a subplot.

Over later today to finish reading some more interesting excerpts you share @ your http://nonexistentbooks.wordpress.com/ , especially "Ami's" shocking response to "K's" romantic gesture (I'm thinking "K" must be in the doghouse BIG time). Good to see you. Enjoy your day.
Reply Suzanne Seese
04:59 PM on April 16, 2012 
I don't think I've read one post with this prompt that is similar to any others. It amazing how many different directions everyone has gone. I really was just joking when I suggested it, I swear!
You have another page turner here Alan. Good job.
Reply Al
06:12 PM on April 16, 2012 
Hello Suzanne!

Thanks for venturing over--much appreciated! Yes, absolutely agree with you, and share your amazement with the varied yet equally interesting takes on this prompt. With the benefit of 20/20 hindsight, am happy you brought this one to the group's attention, and was so proud of you and your husband's handling of the events in the gem you shared @ http://www.viewofsue.blogspot.com/2012/04/dead-bunny.html on your site--cheers! Good to see you. Looking forward to reading more of you and the group in May.